Developing my storyboard/ideas rough

As mentioned in earlier posts, I wish to  tell the story through character emotions- character expressions, body language and overall character performance. I want the story to be lead by emotions. Which may call for redoing style frames and colour scripts- and redoing character design to allow for more expressiveness. 

Re-evaluating  my storyboard, I have been experimenting with parts to add to the story and reworking shots. In this part Iv made the scene end on character one; signalising their importance to  the story,  as the main character. It also allows me to better work logic with the reflection scene.

I edited this part of the story to show her hiding her emotions- an critical mistake, leading to the downfall of her well-being. Instead of the second character being shown as 'ignorant' to her emotions, I wanted her to purposely hide her feelings.

In this edit/rough sketch, I decided to remove the part showing him fall asleep, but instead use sound and maybe typography. As the focus is mainly the first characters, I wanted to show her reaction (which then evokes her way of being sneaky and quiet). Him being asleep makes her feel more alone and gives an window of opportunity to jump with out being stopped (or reasoned with.)

I have also tried to show her thinking process through facial expression and body language. 

I wanted to show her loosing balance to give more characteristic and realness to my character. after catching her balance, she then sneaks to the end of the boat sneaky trying not to wake up the other character.